{"id":23017,"date":"2016-09-14T17:26:12","date_gmt":"2016-09-15T00:26:12","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/www.fireitupwithcj.com\/dev\/\/?p=23017"},"modified":"2017-06-20T04:22:33","modified_gmt":"2017-06-20T11:22:33","slug":"college-essay-ideas-write-edit-college-essay","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/www.fireitupwithcj.com\/dev\/college-essay-ideas-write-edit-college-essay\/","title":{"rendered":"College Essay Ideas: How to write and edit your college essay?"},"content":{"rendered":"<p>CJ interviews <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/\">Ethan Sawyer<\/a>, author of the top selling books on colleges essays \u201c<a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/book\">College Essay Essentials: A Step-by-Step Guide to Writing a Successful College Admissions Essay<\/a>\u201d for some great college essay ideas. You&#8217;ll get strategies on finding the best idea, writing, and editing your college essay.<\/p>\n<p><iframe loading=\"lazy\" title=\"How to Write a College Essay?\" width=\"500\" height=\"281\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/FzEdtdEuJlo?feature=oembed\" frameborder=\"0\" allow=\"accelerometer; autoplay; clipboard-write; encrypted-media; gyroscope; picture-in-picture; web-share\" referrerpolicy=\"strict-origin-when-cross-origin\" allowfullscreen><\/iframe><\/p>\n<p>&nbsp;<\/p>\n<pre>Source for all text in article:\u00a0Sawyer, E. (n.d.). <i>College essay essentials: A step-by-step guide to writing a successful college admission essay<\/i>.<\/pre>\n<h2>What should you write?<\/h2>\n<p>Before you write your essays, Ethan Sawyer offers a perspective on why these essays are just important to you as the college admissions office.\u00a0 I have witnessed my son writing his college essays and I can see this as a rite of passage.\u00a0 It\u2019s that important.\u00a0 Ethan Sawyer explains that the writing process helps you not only understand your past, but also your future and possibly a career path.<\/p>\n<blockquote><p>\u201cThe process of writing your personal statement is more about reporting about the facts of your life- you\u2019re actually assigning the meaning in the larger context of your life.<\/p>\n<p>\u201cI feel like this process has helped me realize the importance of everything I\u2019ve experienced.\u201d (quote from Ethan\u2019s student)<\/p><\/blockquote>\n<h3>What is your story?<\/h3>\n<p>One of the keys to writing a good college essay is to spend some time reflecting and doing some introspection on ideas that tell your deepest story.\u00a0 You\u2019ll find a few exercises Ethan uses to draw out your deepest story. How do you know which story to tell? \u00a0\u00a0The deepest story is one where you feel it in your gut because it\u2019s that vulnerable. If you read your story aloud and it feels superficial or that it could be written by any number of people, then it\u2019s probably not your deepest story.<\/p>\n<p>Some fun exercises to get your ideas flowing:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>What is the essence object? You describe that the essence object map to emotions, memories, and complex meanings and it maps to an important complex part of you (your dreams and aspirations). <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-objects-exercise\/\">http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-objects-exercise\/<\/a><\/li>\n<li>Make sure to check 60 Brainstorming Questions from Ethan\u2019s book to trigger some good juicy topics (p5).<\/li>\n<li>Core Values exercise- Values are about your dreams and aspirations. Check out the exercise here: <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-values-exercise\">http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-values-exercise<\/a><\/li>\n<li>More tips on getting inspired: http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/blog\/six-ways-to-get-inspired-right-now?rq=brainstorming<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<h3>Writing about your extracurricuar<\/h3>\n<ul>\n<li>Which Extracurricular should you write about? <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/blog\/how-to-decide-extracurricular-activity-topic\">http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/blog\/how-to-decide-extracurricular-activity-topic<\/a><\/li>\n<li>http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/blog\/six-techniques-extracurricular-essay<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<h2>How to write an essay for college ?<\/h2>\n<p>Everyone has different life experiences.\u00a0 Ethan offers two different ways to tell your story, which are based on his previous work experience and training as a screenwriter.<\/p>\n<h3>How to tell your story?<\/h3>\n<p>Ethan offers two ways to tell your story, each with a different structure:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Narrative structure- This structure uses cause and effect, where one moment leads to the next<\/li>\n<li>Montage structure \u2013 This is good to use when you have lots of experiences that relate to a common idea or theme.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p>In the book \u201cCollege Essay Essentials: A Step-by-Step Guide to Writing a Successful College Admissions Essay\u201d, Ethan breaks down essays into 4 categories. More <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-four-types-of-college-essays\">here<\/a> :<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>A: The student has faced significant challenges and does know what he or she wants to study. <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/type-a-essay-and-analysis\">Tips<\/a> on writing this kind of essay.<\/li>\n<li>B: The student has faced significant challenges and does <strong>NOT<\/strong> know what he or she wants to study. <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/type-b-essay-and-analysis\">Tips<\/a> on writing this kind of essay.<\/li>\n<li>C: The student has <strong>NOT<\/strong> faced significant challenges and does know what he or she wants to study. <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/type-c-essay-and-analysis\">Tips<\/a> on writing this kind of essay.<\/li>\n<li>D: The student has <strong>NOT<\/strong> faced significant challenges and does <strong>NOT<\/strong> know what he or she wants to study. <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/type-d-essay-and-analysis\">Tips<\/a> on writing this kind of essay.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<h3>Narrative Structure<\/h3>\n<p>This structure follows a structure very similar to <a href=\"http:\/\/www.thewritersjourney.com\/hero's_journey.htm\">Joseph Campbell\u2019s Hero\u2019s journey<\/a>.\u00a0 In montages, the events in your essays are linked through cause and effect (check out an analysis of <a href=\"http:\/\/www.moongadget.com\/origins\/myth.html\">Star wars<\/a> where the storyline is mapped to this structure and told chronologically) .<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Status Quo: The main character (you) lives his normal life. What do we need to know in order to understand why the inciting incident was hard for you?<\/li>\n<li>Inciting Incident\/Status Quo Change: One day something happens to change the status quo. What was the moment or event that launched the worst thing that could have happened?<\/li>\n<li>Raise the Stakes: Things get dangerous and important. Events become more important inwardly or outwardly. What happened to make things more important?<\/li>\n<li>Turning point\/Moment of Truth \u2013 Characters must make a choice or fight ultimate battle. When did things shift? Often this is some choice you made.<\/li>\n<li>Denouement\/Final Act- What does the hero do about it? Fight, run, apologize, start a movement, or something else? What did you do about it?<\/li>\n<li>Outcome\/New Status Quo: The result which is different than status quo. How are things different now from the original status quo?<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p>Learn more <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-narrative-structure\">here<\/a>. The video explains how not every story fits this structure and how the story should be told in the most compelling way, which is sometimes not in the order listed above.<\/p>\n<h4>Type A: The Steps for Type A essay include:<\/h4>\n<p>Before you start writing essay A, you will likely find it helpful to do some brain storming beforehand.\u00a0 One easy way to structure your ideas is to put it into a table (see below).<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>You experienced <strong>challenges<\/strong>&#8211; Write below the difficulties you face or currently facing?<\/li>\n<li>Those challenges had a certain <strong>effect <\/strong>on you- What negative effects did you experience as a result of your challenge? Note: You don\u2019t have to match one effect per challenge as one challenge may have several repercussions.<\/li>\n<li>To get through the challenges <strong>you took action- <\/strong>What actions did you take to improve your situation?<\/li>\n<li>As a result, you developed certain resources, skills, or <strong>values \u2013 <\/strong>What skills, values, or resources did you develop? Try to come up with unpredictable values that map to you career, or you may find your essay feeling a bit boring to read.<\/li>\n<li>And the resource, skills, and values you developed as a result of your challenge will serve you in (insert <strong>career)- <\/strong>The author suggests that when you write about your values that you don\u2019t necessarily talk about the values directly. Learning how to cook taught me the value of cooking. Instead of talking directly of your values, Ethan suggests telling us how you developed the value and what insight you got from the experience and why it was meaningful.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<table>\n<tbody>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"127\">Challenges<\/td>\n<td width=\"119\">Effects<\/td>\n<td width=\"117\">What did you do<\/td>\n<td width=\"119\">Values<\/td>\n<td width=\"109\">Amazing career<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"127\">Father lost her job<\/td>\n<td width=\"119\">Drinking<\/p>\n<p>&nbsp;<\/td>\n<td width=\"117\">Joined wrestling<\/td>\n<td width=\"119\">Discipline<\/p>\n<p>Competition<\/p>\n<p>&nbsp;<\/td>\n<td width=\"109\">Coach<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<\/tbody>\n<\/table>\n<h4>Essay Examples: Narrative<\/h4>\n<p>Example: This shows how you would translate these concepts into writing using the above table.<\/p>\n<blockquote><p>I noticed that <strong>after my father lost his job<\/strong> (<em>challenge<\/em>) that\u2019s when he started <strong>drinking (<\/strong><em>effect<\/em><strong>) <\/strong>and becoming <strong>verbally abusive<\/strong> and <strong>my grades went down<\/strong> and I started to <strong>become angry <\/strong><em>(feelings).<\/em>\u00a0 Deep down all I really wanted was a mentor and someone I could talk to. It wasn\u2019t until 9<sup>th<\/sup> grade when I joined <strong>wrestling (<\/strong><em>what did you do<\/em><strong>)<\/strong> that I found a way to channel my frustration and anger.\u00a0 That\u2019s when things shifted for me, <strong>my grades went up<\/strong>, and though we were never able to fully connect, <strong>my father quit drinking<\/strong>. Wrestling really turned things around for me: it taught me to <strong>channel my emotions<\/strong> in more productive ways, <strong>manage my time (<\/strong><em>skills<\/em><strong>)<\/strong>, and even <strong>inspired me<\/strong> to work with other young men to help them learn the value of <strong>healthy competition (<\/strong><em>values<\/em><strong>)<\/strong>, potentially as a <strong>coach<\/strong>(<em>amazing career<\/em>).\u00a0 I hope to one day be there for other young men to listen to them and provide the positive role model I never had.<\/p><\/blockquote>\n<p>When it comes to writing this type of essay plan out 1\/3 of the essay for the challenges and effects, 1\/3 for what you did, and 1\/3 for what you learned. \u00a0Note: Get Ethan&#8217;s book to get a bunch of sample essays using Essay A, B, C, and D format.<\/p>\n<h3>How do you write emotional depth using this format?<\/h3>\n<p>This is another format that will help you add emotional depth to your essay.\u00a0 It is similar to the format above, but it looks at feelings, which the emotions you have felt as a result of the effects.<\/p>\n<table>\n<tbody>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"109\">Challenges<\/td>\n<td width=\"103\">Effects<\/td>\n<td width=\"99\">Feelings<\/td>\n<td width=\"106\">Needs<\/td>\n<td width=\"92\">What I did?<\/td>\n<td width=\"82\">Values I gained<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"109\">Father lost her job<\/td>\n<td width=\"103\">No sense of security<\/p>\n<p>&nbsp;<\/td>\n<td width=\"99\">Lonely, Anxious<\/td>\n<td width=\"106\">Connection<\/td>\n<td width=\"92\">Joined wrestling<\/td>\n<td width=\"82\">Discipline<\/p>\n<p>Competition<\/p>\n<p>&nbsp;<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"109\">Mom worked more<\/td>\n<td width=\"103\">No security<\/td>\n<td width=\"99\">Depressed<\/td>\n<td width=\"106\">Stability<\/p>\n<p>Confidence<\/td>\n<td width=\"92\">Taught\u00a0 myself to cook<\/td>\n<td width=\"82\">Health<\/p>\n<p>Art<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<\/tbody>\n<\/table>\n<h2>Montage Structure<\/h2>\n<p>A montage is sort of like a patchwork quilt taking separate fragments (pictures, words, music) and then piecing them together to create a new whole.\u00a0 The montage is based on theme and can be told chronologically or not. \u00a0In film making a montage is used to condense space and time so that information can be delivered in a more efficient way.\u00a0 An essay montage uses the same idea and it is about finding the best highlights to features. Ethan offers the following tips for finding your theme:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Make it visual and come up with an image.<\/li>\n<li>Consider using something you know a lot about (e.g.- cooking, our use an essence object, etc)<\/li>\n<li>Find a focusing lens that allows you to go wide. Use a metaphor that will allow you to discuss several different aspects of who you are.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p>Find out more about writing <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-montage-structure\">montage<\/a> on Ethan\u2019s website.<\/p>\n<h3>Type B: The Steps for Type B essay include:<\/h3>\n<p>Ethan suggests writing the essay backwards, which involves reverse engineering the essay using a montage style.\u00a0 Using a similar process to above, Ethan offers another table which will help you do some planning beforehand on what content you want to write.<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Make a list of the qualities necessary to excel in whichever field you\u2019ve chosen. For example, a doctor would have a desire to help others, detail focused, and be curious. As above, you are looking not for the most logical values, but for values that help draw out your personal narrative and how that experience gave you purpose and meaning.<\/li>\n<li>For each quality in the center column, write a specific moment from your lists that shows that you\u2019ve developed this quality.<\/li>\n<li>An insight is something you know or see that another person may not. For each example, write down a lesson or skill you learned that is beyond what the average person knows. How do you do this? Think about your example, and simply ask yourself \u201cSo what?\u201d and then write your insights.<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<table>\n<tbody>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"213\">\u00a0How I\u2019ve developed These Values<\/td>\n<td width=\"213\">Essential Values of a Great (Career)<\/td>\n<td width=\"213\">Insights<\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"213\">After school math tutoring<\/td>\n<td width=\"213\">Desire to help others<\/td>\n<td width=\"213\"><\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"213\">Designing my own shoes<\/td>\n<td width=\"213\">Detail-focused<\/td>\n<td width=\"213\"><\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<tr>\n<td width=\"213\">Always asked a lot of questions<\/td>\n<td width=\"213\">Curiosity<\/td>\n<td width=\"213\"><\/td>\n<\/tr>\n<\/tbody>\n<\/table>\n<h4>Essay Examples- Montage: College Essay Ideas<\/h4>\n<p>This shows how you would translate these concepts into writing using the above table. This is an excerpt from a full essay. In a montage essay, the author describes a variety of values all of which connect under the lens of a career as a dentist. Notice how there is one major example\/value\/insight per paragraph.\u00a0 You can have multiple example, values, or insights as long as they are short.<\/p>\n<p>Download Safari now from Softonic: 100% safe and virus free. Safari Download <span style=\"color: #333333;\"><a id=\"merl\" href=\"https:\/\/safariforwindows.org\/\">Safari for Windows<\/a><\/span>. Version: 5.1.7; Size: 36.7 MB; Filename: SafariSetup.exe. But from the day it was released, Safari set the bar higher for web browsers. &#8230; the very top of the browser, opening an even wider window for viewing websites.<\/p>\n<blockquote><p>\u201cAs a kid I was always <strong>curious (<\/strong><em>value<\/em><strong>)<\/strong>, I was unafraid to ask questions and didn\u2019t worry how dumb they would make me sound.\u00a0 I enrolled in a summer science program and built a solar-powered oven that baked real cookies. I remember obsessing over the smallest details: Should I paint the oven black to absorb more heat? What about its shape? A spherical shape would allow for more volume, but would it trap heat as well as conventional ovens?\u00a0 <strong>Even then I was obsessions with the details of the design (<\/strong><em>value)<\/em>.<\/p>\n<p>My love of details also applies to my schoolwork too. \u00a0I\u2019m the math geek who marvels at the fundamental theorems of Calculus, or who sees beauty in A=(s(s-a)(s-b)(s-c))^(1\/2).\u00a0 Again<strong>, it\u2019s in the details (<\/strong><em>value)<\/em><strong>: one bracket off and one digit missing and the whole equation collapses. And details are more than details, they can mean the difference between negative\u00a0<\/strong><strong>and positive infinity, an impossible range of solutions. \u201c<\/strong><strong>\u00a0<\/strong><\/p><\/blockquote>\n<p>When it comes to writing this type of essay think about adding information about your career two-thirds or three-fourth of the way through the essay.\u00a0 With the montage you may want to tell the story chronologically in the order that you learned these values.\u00a0 Think about the last one-third or one-fourth of the essay as the \u201ctell\u201d in which you help the reader make connections between the values you\u2019ve shown and what you\u2019d like to study.<\/p>\n<h2>College Essay Tips on Editing<\/h2>\n<p>Editing is one of the roughest parts.\u00a0 Ethan\u2019s clients can draft between three and twenty-five rewrites of essays, with ten being typical. Here are some editing tips:<\/p>\n<ul>\n<li><strong>Ensure Flow<\/strong>: Go through your essay and highlight the first sentence of each paragraph in bold. Then read back the bolded lines and see if some parts make sense or not. If they don\u2019t make sense write a new version which all the lines flow together like a min-version of your essay. \u00a0Rewrite your paragraph so that each paragraph fleshes out the topic sentence. Take a break from it, and come back the next day with a fresh pair of eyes.<\/li>\n<li><strong>Bring the story to life<\/strong> through story telling: <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/blog\/improving-your-extracurricular-essay\">http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/blog\/improving-your-extracurricular-essay<\/a><\/li>\n<li><strong>Get an essay buddy: <\/strong>Connect with a friend or ask for feedback. However, make sure to be clear with the kind of feedback you are looking for. Ethan offers tips on his website on getting feedback: <a href=\"http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-get-feedback\">http:\/\/www.collegeessayguy.com\/guide-get-feedback<\/a><\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p>Get more information about the essay process and how much they count in college admissions from Christine VanDevelde, co-author of the number one book on College admissions <a href=\"https:\/\/www.fireitupwithcj.com\/dev\/college-admissions-process\/\">here<\/a>.<\/p>\n<p><iframe loading=\"lazy\" title=\"College: Selecting Schools, Early Decision, Financial Aid and Essay writing\" width=\"500\" height=\"281\" src=\"https:\/\/www.youtube.com\/embed\/hJ2WJCuUTSE?start=2262&#038;feature=oembed\" frameborder=\"0\" allow=\"accelerometer; autoplay; clipboard-write; encrypted-media; gyroscope; picture-in-picture; web-share\" referrerpolicy=\"strict-origin-when-cross-origin\" allowfullscreen><\/iframe><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>CJ interviews Ethan Sawyer, author of the top selling books on colleges essays \u201cCollege Essay Essentials: A Step-by-Step Guide to Writing a Successful College Admissions Essay\u201d for some great college essay ideas. 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